The Crocodile Show
“Come on,” I yelled to my sister, “if you do not hurry we will miss the show!” My sister and I were on our way to the crocodile show.
“Are we there?” asked Lily.
“Yes,” I called to her. We gave our tickets to the man waiting outside the building. I gasped when we got in. The pool was humongous and really wide. We sat down and waited. After a while a crocodile jumped within 15feet of me and sprayed water all over my orange t-shirt. When we got home my sister collapsed onto the sofa. Next time we will take the bus.
Great Story! the only thing I would recommend is to change "Yes", I called to her.
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Sorry, but that change doesn't really make sense because she's yelling "Yes" and if you change it to "Yes I called her" that would be what she's shouting out.
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