THE POT
Have you heard of the eating
pot? 3 years ago, I went hiking in the forest. I got lost in the forest and
called for help, but no one came. Just then something grabbed me by ankles. When
I looked around I noticed that I was in a pot with legs sticking out of it. I tried to get out but I couldn’t.
I heard someone call my name. I looked around and found my parents. I told them about the pot, but they did not believe me. I looked all around for
the pot, but I couldn’t find it. I went home quietly.
Capitalize eating Pot.
ReplyDelete3 years ago I went hiking in the forest. You need to add a comma after ago. I looked around and found my parents looking me with concern. You need to add the word at, I looked around and found my parents looking at me with concern. told them about the pot but they didn’t believe me. I looked for the pot but I couldn’t find it. In both of these sentences you need to add a comma after pot.
ReplyDeleteBut you have a great story!
thanks annabeth
DeleteYou need to add the word-at-8th sentence, in-between looking- me, you need to add at.
ReplyDeleteok thank you
DeleteGreat story! But when you said "they didn't believe me," You should change the didn't to did not, because you can't use contractions in formal writing.
ReplyDeletethank u cupcake
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